tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post150217405822757462..comments2021-08-21T01:28:59.236-06:00Comments on Ramblings of a Writer: Last Lines BlogfestAmy Johttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05083333388180804799noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-56802316948843094102010-05-04T07:25:16.453-06:002010-05-04T07:25:16.453-06:00Very nice twist at the end. Great job. :)Very nice twist at the end. Great job. :)Rebecca T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11994380364321336824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-39951607876931417842010-05-02T02:16:52.452-06:002010-05-02T02:16:52.452-06:00oooh! Intriguing! Nice work here, Amy. Love this q...oooh! Intriguing! Nice work here, Amy. Love this quick flash of regret in amongst feelings of contentment.Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-62663703750375134452010-05-01T21:40:29.409-06:002010-05-01T21:40:29.409-06:00Who is this Owen and why is he better than Luke???...Who is this Owen and why is he better than Luke??? Great scene, the regret and flash of happiness gone when it returns. Well done.Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-4357952418237194802010-05-01T21:32:03.886-06:002010-05-01T21:32:03.886-06:00Wow! You are a busy woman! At a writing retreat ...Wow! You are a busy woman! At a writing retreat and posting for blogfests at the same time. I hope you're having fun (or you've had fun) up there!Andriahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11399682348211528396noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-63034978028372783032010-05-01T20:15:26.281-06:002010-05-01T20:15:26.281-06:00Now, that's my kind of ending! I loved the cha...Now, that's my kind of ending! I loved the character's realization. How fun! (Well, for me, maybe not for the character :) ) Thanks for participating!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-36537498814153613902010-05-01T18:42:13.668-06:002010-05-01T18:42:13.668-06:00Nice scene. Just to echo other commenters, I love ...Nice scene. Just to echo other commenters, I love the last line. Such a twist.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-24935473012457990642010-05-01T15:30:01.964-06:002010-05-01T15:30:01.964-06:00LOVE that last line!!!
(PS: is it bad that when I...LOVE that last line!!!<br /><br />(PS: is it bad that when I saw Luke and Owen as your character names, I totally thought of the Wilson brothers? hehehe)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-19823776663754816272010-05-01T14:22:28.603-06:002010-05-01T14:22:28.603-06:00Good twist.
My old ski buddy growing up never wou...Good twist.<br /><br />My old ski buddy growing up never would let us yell, "Hit it!" to make the boat go.<br /><br />Nope. Not him. "Say it, Eric!"<br /><br />"Just hit it!"<br /><br />"I'm not going until you say it!"<br /><br />Everyone in the boat laughing at me trying to stay balanced with that slalom ski.<br /><br />"Fine... HIT IT BIG SKI DADDY!"<br /><br />You made me miss skiing sooooo much.<br /><br /><br /> - EricEric W. Tranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13842968931062056407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-39395769531290048652010-05-01T14:08:57.664-06:002010-05-01T14:08:57.664-06:00Good advice. I usually have something in mind when...Good advice. I usually have something in mind when I sign up for a blogfest but not always. I thought I had one for this, but then changed my mind like 5+ times. <br /><br />Great job with the last line here. It has an emotional impact that fits the mood/tempo of the scene presented.Dawn Embershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00214560861614476799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-59628520302371209262010-05-01T13:21:37.360-06:002010-05-01T13:21:37.360-06:00haha, love the twist.haha, love the twist.Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16915603693944523761noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-65636300068751596242010-05-01T12:34:13.020-06:002010-05-01T12:34:13.020-06:00I liked this, it was cute and sweet. However, I j...I liked this, it was cute and sweet. However, I just have one tiny little question -- Luke and Owen. Last name wouldn't be Wilson would it?Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-62464267639163114392010-05-01T12:25:51.326-06:002010-05-01T12:25:51.326-06:00That is great! Fabulous job of moving us in one di...That is great! Fabulous job of moving us in one direction, then putting the perfect spin at the very end. Excellent!bryan sabolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05372105145736459057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-49626722215490646032010-05-01T11:44:28.894-06:002010-05-01T11:44:28.894-06:00Great last line with a twist. I, too, had a hard t...Great last line with a twist. I, too, had a hard time picking because my best last lines are in pivotal scenes or give things away. I like your choice.Kristie Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01649966564896771373noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-23760340648463230692010-05-01T11:21:41.534-06:002010-05-01T11:21:41.534-06:00Good scene, well written. Empathy is evoked from t...Good scene, well written. Empathy is evoked from the reader with that ending which is so real. A lot of women, and men, have been there once or twice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-48009533199961282882010-05-01T08:24:27.233-06:002010-05-01T08:24:27.233-06:00The mind is a dangerous thing, when a touch can ta...The mind is a dangerous thing, when a touch can take you from present happiness to past regret.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-86502572093965605102010-05-01T07:54:58.391-06:002010-05-01T07:54:58.391-06:00Wow. Nice twist right there. Definitely caught my ...Wow. Nice twist right there. Definitely caught my attention. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9054890034501683736.post-27457697203487470732010-05-01T07:34:13.784-06:002010-05-01T07:34:13.784-06:00Oh, oh, oh! What a nice twist in that last line. I...Oh, oh, oh! What a nice twist in that last line. I'm reading along thinking, what fun, how cute, oh, a crush...BAM but it's the wrong guy.<br /><br />Yay! I loved it.Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.com