Note to self: Do not sign up for a blogfest until after I make sure I have a piece to submit! I get so excited when I learn about new blogfests that I forget to think about whether or not I will have time to put a piece together. The Last Lines Blogfest, hosted by Lilah Pierce, was more difficult than I anticipated.
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Oh, oh, oh! What a nice twist in that last line. I'm reading along thinking, what fun, how cute, oh, a crush...BAM but it's the wrong guy.
Yay! I loved it.
Wow. Nice twist right there. Definitely caught my attention. :)
The mind is a dangerous thing, when a touch can take you from present happiness to past regret.
Good scene, well written. Empathy is evoked from the reader with that ending which is so real. A lot of women, and men, have been there once or twice.
Great last line with a twist. I, too, had a hard time picking because my best last lines are in pivotal scenes or give things away. I like your choice.
That is great! Fabulous job of moving us in one direction, then putting the perfect spin at the very end. Excellent!
I liked this, it was cute and sweet. However, I just have one tiny little question -- Luke and Owen. Last name wouldn't be Wilson would it?
haha, love the twist.
Good advice. I usually have something in mind when I sign up for a blogfest but not always. I thought I had one for this, but then changed my mind like 5+ times.
Great job with the last line here. It has an emotional impact that fits the mood/tempo of the scene presented.
Good twist.
My old ski buddy growing up never would let us yell, "Hit it!" to make the boat go.
Nope. Not him. "Say it, Eric!"
"Just hit it!"
"I'm not going until you say it!"
Everyone in the boat laughing at me trying to stay balanced with that slalom ski.
"Fine... HIT IT BIG SKI DADDY!"
You made me miss skiing sooooo much.
- Eric
LOVE that last line!!!
(PS: is it bad that when I saw Luke and Owen as your character names, I totally thought of the Wilson brothers? hehehe)
Nice scene. Just to echo other commenters, I love the last line. Such a twist.
Now, that's my kind of ending! I loved the character's realization. How fun! (Well, for me, maybe not for the character :) ) Thanks for participating!
Wow! You are a busy woman! At a writing retreat and posting for blogfests at the same time. I hope you're having fun (or you've had fun) up there!
Who is this Owen and why is he better than Luke??? Great scene, the regret and flash of happiness gone when it returns. Well done.
oooh! Intriguing! Nice work here, Amy. Love this quick flash of regret in amongst feelings of contentment.
Very nice twist at the end. Great job. :)
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