I figure that while I'm exposing myself with my first manuscript, I might as well do it with my second one too (see previous post for more information).
Below is the first page of Over the Edge:
[Excerpt has been removed to protect my work.]
1 month ago
18 comments:
I already like Kennedy. :) And I want to know more about her. You have some great description here, but this line?
Unlike the sporty SUV she used to drive, it coughed twice before engaging into a steady roar.
I love the imagery of that line. :)
I want to read some more. :) You're a great writer and you've already hooked me with the first page. I think I'm now a fan of your blog. :)
When do I get to read the rest of the novel? You've spiked my interest... and that name Kennedy... where have I heard that before?!?!
I felt for Kennedy, she is struggling so. Did she take 13 tablets? Is a tragedy underway?
hi *waves* nice to meet you. I enjoyed both of your first pages. You have a nice easy flowing style that is easy to read and I would keep reading on both of them.
Your blog is so cute!!! I love the little flowers on the side!!
I am also glad I visited during blogfest!!! They are both great pieces I wish you had given more!!! I love how easy to read it is!
I really want to know more about this troubled girl! Great writing!
I love the imagry you use. And thanks for your kind words concerning my own first page. Have a delightful weekend, Roland
I loved your blog. Keep writing, and reading ... blessings...
I already adore Kennedy - and feel for her. Nice job! I want to know more :)
Oh, I'm hooked. Why the pills? Why is it her fault they had to move? Great opening! I'd turn the page for sure. THanks for participating!
Interesting - I like the details - definitely want to keep reading.
Nice details and imagery. Great writing voice. Would like to flip the page. Well done.
Thanks for dropping in to see my latest post -- and the confidence in me as a writer and human being to see this walk of faith through. Have a great new week, Roland
Yes. I'm intrigued, too, but have many questions. Of course, this is just a first glimpse.
Saw your comment on Lola Sharp's blog that told about your New Year's resolution to write everyday. Would you like to join us in the Blogging From A to Z April Challenge? The deadline to sign up is tomorrow by 5 PM Pacific Time. If you haven't seen what's happening check it out and see what you think. There has been a lot of very positive response to this. Let me know if you are interested.
Lee
I want more. I want to know what is happening with Kennedy. There was some wonderful imagery here.
Thanks for finding my blog and leaving a comment. What a treat to follow it back here to your bloggy world.
I challenge you to make time to write 5 days/week, even if just for 20 minutes/day. Please keep in touch. I'll be happy to cheer you on. Pom-poms and all.
Happy Easter/Spring,
Lola
This is such an excellent piece. I can't wait to read more of it. And the title fits it so well!
I wonder, though, if Kennedy would check her bag for her schedule more than once.
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