Friday, April 2, 2010

First Page Blogfest - Part Two

I figure that while I'm exposing myself with my first manuscript, I might as well do it with my second one too (see previous post for more information).

Below is the first page of Over the Edge:

[Excerpt has been removed to protect my work.]

18 comments:

sarahjayne smythe said...

I already like Kennedy. :) And I want to know more about her. You have some great description here, but this line?

Unlike the sporty SUV she used to drive, it coughed twice before engaging into a steady roar.

I love the imagery of that line. :)

Mel said...

I want to read some more. :) You're a great writer and you've already hooked me with the first page. I think I'm now a fan of your blog. :)

Heath said...

When do I get to read the rest of the novel? You've spiked my interest... and that name Kennedy... where have I heard that before?!?!

Elaine AM Smith said...

I felt for Kennedy, she is struggling so. Did she take 13 tablets? Is a tragedy underway?

Charity Bradford said...

hi *waves* nice to meet you. I enjoyed both of your first pages. You have a nice easy flowing style that is easy to read and I would keep reading on both of them.

Jen said...

Your blog is so cute!!! I love the little flowers on the side!!

I am also glad I visited during blogfest!!! They are both great pieces I wish you had given more!!! I love how easy to read it is!

Catherine A. Winn said...

I really want to know more about this troubled girl! Great writing!

Roland D. Yeomans said...

I love the imagry you use. And thanks for your kind words concerning my own first page. Have a delightful weekend, Roland

ANULAL said...

I loved your blog. Keep writing, and reading ... blessings...

Tara said...

I already adore Kennedy - and feel for her. Nice job! I want to know more :)

Kelly Lyman said...

Oh, I'm hooked. Why the pills? Why is it her fault they had to move? Great opening! I'd turn the page for sure. THanks for participating!

Mary Campbell said...

Interesting - I like the details - definitely want to keep reading.

TerryLynnJohnson said...

Nice details and imagery. Great writing voice. Would like to flip the page. Well done.

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Thanks for dropping in to see my latest post -- and the confidence in me as a writer and human being to see this walk of faith through. Have a great new week, Roland

Mary Aalgaard said...

Yes. I'm intrigued, too, but have many questions. Of course, this is just a first glimpse.

arlee bird said...

Saw your comment on Lola Sharp's blog that told about your New Year's resolution to write everyday. Would you like to join us in the Blogging From A to Z April Challenge? The deadline to sign up is tomorrow by 5 PM Pacific Time. If you haven't seen what's happening check it out and see what you think. There has been a lot of very positive response to this. Let me know if you are interested.
Lee

Lola Sharp said...

I want more. I want to know what is happening with Kennedy. There was some wonderful imagery here.

Thanks for finding my blog and leaving a comment. What a treat to follow it back here to your bloggy world.

I challenge you to make time to write 5 days/week, even if just for 20 minutes/day. Please keep in touch. I'll be happy to cheer you on. Pom-poms and all.

Happy Easter/Spring,
Lola

Andria said...

This is such an excellent piece. I can't wait to read more of it. And the title fits it so well!

I wonder, though, if Kennedy would check her bag for her schedule more than once.